Monday, June 9, 2014

A Poem

 Here's a poem I wrote that I'd like to share with you.
Please don't be rude about it, I'm not much of a writer. 

There once was a bird called Mira
Who lived in a place called Jamaa
The Jammers were her creations
And Mira valued them all
They were kind, joyful, and optimistic
Playing on land and in sea
But darkness spread through Jamaa
Until Mira could barely see
The cheats, scams, and horrible things
The darkness was you and me
It spread faster, faster
Until the darkness was welcomed
And Jammers copied its actions
But others wanted it gone
It was clear in their reactions
They fought, they tried
But it wouldn't leave
Nobody could remove the darkness
The darkness was you and me
Harder, with more effort they fought
Alliances were formed
Schools and parents had always taught
That dark actions were scorned
So this came as quite a surprise
It was such a horrible thought
And everyone was warned
And still in Jamaa the darkness lives on
Never dying or fading, you see
And Mira can no longer save Jamaa
The darkness is you and me
We scam, we steal
We cheat, we hurt
We do bad things constantly
And this is why Jamaa can't be saved by Mira
But it can be saved by you and me

20 comments:

  1. That poem is so true.. :(

    YOU DON'T HAVE TO GIVE ME A RACCOON HAT I JUST HAD TO COMMENT THAT. XD

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  2. The poem is true, I love it (because its a good poem) and hate it (because it's true)!!!!!! It (sadly) fits so well with modern Jamaa....

    I don't needt a raccoon hat either, it's fine lol

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  3. I love that poem! It's true. We created this darkness, but we can also fix it. And I don't need a raccoon hat, either, unless you really want to. :)

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  4. i don't know if 2fangwolf counted, but you don't have to give me the raccoon hat. Great Post BTW. :) ^.^

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  5. So we are evil Thats deep man " You see your darkness what your really are By the little things you do Evilness by far
    Look in the mirror watch what do Cause the little packet of evilness can slip into your heart to" Awesome btw Hmm that may be a poem

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  6. Thanks again everyone for the nice comments c: I'm glad u support!

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  7. I really like ur poem, it's so interesting! I loved how u used Mira as a main character in the poem =)

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  8. Thank you guys!! I'm getting so many positive comments I don't know what to do!! :D

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  9. Your such an amazing blog owner I made a poem just for you.
    "What you do is my inspiration
    I want to do it everyday
    Without you I would have no creation
    I hoped you like this is in many ways"
    I LOVE WHAT YOU DO FOR US

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  10. Wow! True! It's a beautifully written piece I could call more than a masterpiece. It's so true, yet so tragic... I just written a tale much similar to this yesterday and had it published as an anti-scamming petition story!

    Please check my blog (rainbow000pegasus.wordpress.com) and sign the petition for anti-scamming!

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    1. @ Fang:
      I agree with everyone else basically lol. This poem is awesome, but not what it's about. This poem basically defines modern-day Jamaa (seeing scammers/scammer victims every day on AJ, etc.); we can fix up Jamaa. Believe! *o*

      @ Rainbow: First, thanks for accepting my buddy request. :3 And second, all your stories are so epic and pawsome. (So is yours on here,"Freiheit" :D) I can't really comment on your blog because it asks me to fill in my email and all that, which I don't like filling in. So sorry about that, rainbow!

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  11. Amazing poem, most poems are not true but urs is!!! :DDDD ( i like ur poem )


    - Ava683

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  12. That poem is very inspirational, and unfortunately true. You're a incredible poet. I hope that one day we can stop all of the darkness.

    :) :) !!!!

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  13. sooooooooooooo true bat if ppl work to make jamma a better place (my fav thing to say to ppl) nothing is inpossable (i dont know how to spell it) when you set your mind/s to it

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  14. I love poetry!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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